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I'lI always adore you from afar
Like a poet adores the moon, embracing all its
scars
I know we were never meant for each other
so, I couldn't be yours
But the love I carry for you in my heart
will always be secured
I will make sure that
I never lose your memory
I'll save every look of yours
in my heart like a treasury
I am gonna say this now
and every time I miss you
That I was and I am grateful for
having you in my life,
and I' never stop loving you
l'll never stop loving you.

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Free verse
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem effectively uses metaphor and simile to convey the speaker's emotions, such as in the line "Like a poet adores the moon, embracing all its scars". This line not only communicates the depth of the speaker's feelings but also introduces the theme of unattainable love, which is further developed throughout the poem.

However, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structure. Most lines follow a similar pattern, which can make the poem feel monotonous. Experimenting with different sentence lengths and structures could add interest and dynamism to the poem.

In terms of language, the poem is quite straightforward and literal. While this can make the poem accessible, it also limits the poem's potential for evoking complex emotions and ideas. Consider using more figurative language and imagery to deepen the poem's emotional impact.

Finally, the poem's theme of unrequited love is a common one in poetry. To make the poem stand out, consider exploring this theme from a unique angle or incorporating unexpected elements. This could make the poem more memorable and engaging for readers.

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