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Love Addict

Submitted by hippiemoon on Mon, 2024-09-16 03:02

I used to think that rehab was the end all be all,
Anyone sent there would never be addicted again.
Then I met you, and I realized why drugs are so hard to quit.

I swear your kiss has something in it,
Because I’ve never craved something so much.

Your smile is my morphine,
Immediately melting me
And easing my worries.

Who needs heroin when I have your touch?
I get the same euphoric feeling from you.

I’m high on love,
Who needs drugs?

I’m itching for a hit,
You’re on my mind 24/7.

So maybe I’m not a junkie with used needles,
Sunken yellow skin,
Or missing teeth,
But even rehab couldn’t save me
From the way I’m addicted to you.

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neopoet

Mon, 2024-09-16 09:02

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Alex Tanner

Mon, 2024-09-16 09:45

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Not one of my favourites of your writings but I can't criticise it and I do like your style. Alex

Rula

Sat, 2024-09-21 02:50

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I had to agree with Alex.
The metaphor used is well chosen for love addiction, however the rhythm and the flow needs to be smoother in some places. Some lines are so long and read more like prose.
Looking forward to reading the edited version if you choose to.
Thank you for sharing.

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