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She .... she came for a moment
She ....
she came for a moment
a fleeting one
just to give me energy
Divine
she was drunk by my eyes
and like wine dissolved
into the universe
in a momentous moment
gave me the fruits of joy
men need most
of an intent
to creativity
a beautiful content
then in the eyes of god
she merged after that
monumentous moment...
devoid of all love and emotion
she did vanish
why did she have to come
a truthful heart
a soul banish
heaven alone knows
why so!
lovely poet she was
twas..
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Ian.T
Tue, 2014-04-22 04:34
Loved
The theme is grand and can be made a little better but as it is you have written a good piece again.
Just read through it and edit a little to make this excel, I think the last word is obsolete.
Good write young Bard, take care,
Yours Ian.T
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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
lovedly
Fri, 2014-11-28 13:24
just upgrading less than two comments so old a lovely poem u
just upgrading less than two comments
so old
a lovely poem unread
heaven has now me
loved sent