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Restless
Restless is the storm fed ocean
Where she has left a bounty
There upon the shore
But seagulls will not venture
Knowing where the danger lies
If the truth be pure and simple
They'll be no need for alibis
The wind is high and wild
fires sweep the land
as I stare out my window
My coffee cup in hand
A wry smile upon my face
for I now understand
The story is from times of old
over and over it has been told
and oh, by the way
my coffee's gone cold
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Comments
Starlight
Sat, 2012-02-18 22:33
this is beautiful.
this is beautiful.
China Blue
Sat, 2012-02-18 22:44
Star
Many Thanks
and welcome to Neopoet
Chrys
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
China Blue
Wed, 2012-02-22 20:54
Lon
Thank you muchly. didn't you know that I am in the amazing business?
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
Candlewitch
Wed, 2012-02-22 16:39
Dear Chrys,
Excellent! I love seeing things from your viewpoint!
always, Cat
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China Blue
Wed, 2012-02-22 20:54
Cat
awww thank you
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)
weirdelf
Thu, 2012-02-23 08:59
Delightful!
You have used language, imagery and meaning to produce a really fine poem. Sorry, I have no crit, except I am jealous!
Your wordcrafting is superb.
cheers,
Jess
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China Blue
Fri, 2012-02-24 00:28
Jess
Thank you
Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)