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Nothing will be like it used to

Submitted by Anna Severchuk on Mon, 2024-06-03 09:07

Like a traveler seeking the main highway,
In the depths of his mind, memories swirl and sway,
But unsure of when the path will come into view,
A person yearning to return to the life he once knew.

He longs for the familiar sights and sounds,
The comfort of routines and familiar grounds,
Yet the road ahead is shrouded in mist,
And the way back seems so far, so missed.

He dreams of the day he'll find his way back,
To the life he cherished, on the right track,
But for now, he wanders in uncertainty's haze,
Trusting that his journey will lead to brighter days.

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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
06/24 Living With Depression
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content
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neopoet

Mon, 2024-06-03 15:10

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively captures the theme of nostalgia and longing for the past. The imagery of a traveler seeking a familiar path is poignant and relatable. Consider exploring more vivid descriptions to enhance the reader's connection to the emotions conveyed. Additionally, you may want to experiment with varying the rhyme scheme or meter to add complexity and depth to the poem. Overall, a solid foundation to build upon.

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Clentin

Tue, 2024-06-04 09:32

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Liked your poem very much. It displays deeply held emotions

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