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Far visions
In the far distance of my minds vision
I see flowers from the Garden of Eden
more humans flower each day
many wither away
but for times immemorial the gardens stay
all newer generation comers have a good day
tis a lovely morn
and an enchanting sunrise
just for you today
as my voice in harmony
words and thoughts
for you all display
friends come along
have a very propitious
lucky ...happy and merry today
as we all compose
on such a lovely day
friends
of ours today......
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
emeka ozurumba
Tue, 2014-05-06 13:41
your poetic friend i truly am
your poetic friend i truly am
loved
Tue, 2014-05-06 14:31
so am I urs
some one read it somewhere
and selected this one for a competition
great feelings no !!!!!
but my poetry is not to be subjected
to humiliation
so i said
NO!!!SIMPLY NO !!!
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weirdelf
Thu, 2014-05-15 08:15
Every time you use the word
poet or poetic in a poem you are being self-reflexise and a non-poetic. Mostly when you whine about not getting read enough.
cheers,
Jess
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loved
Thu, 2014-05-15 08:38
thanks
advice well taken reviewed any better ? now
loved