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And who is God ...
And who is God
When I was young ...
I asked my teacher ...ma'am why does the Earth have human beings...
and why there are no more Earths elsewhere ....
there must be
she said
No there is only one Earth and God made it
I asked who is God.
she put a finger on her lips....shh shh shh
today I read some news
NASA says 4.2 billion Earths elsewhere....
I think
God must be a factory man
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Ian.T
Wed, 2013-11-06 03:44
Loved
Same answer:-
Answer
Naturally!! lol
Number 42
Comments need a lot of work to become poems young bard, are you being lazy.?????
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
mand
Wed, 2013-11-06 06:39
We might need those other
We might need those other Earths the way we humans are destroying this one! :)
Interesting and thought provoking. ( something I've come to expect from your poetry ).
Love Mand xxxxx
Seren
Wed, 2013-11-06 07:00
Loved
I have to agree with Ian this is a little messy and its not pleasing to the eye but saying that the content is there again you just have to craft it and hone it till it shines like a new penny
see what you can do eh ? ;)
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Wed, 2013-11-06 12:00
I will do ...what happened
to the other one
you promised to polish
loved
Seren
Thu, 2013-11-07 06:32
you may have to remind me I
you may have to remind me I have been gone for a while ? ;)
JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Sun, 2013-11-10 14:42
a reminder
as desired This is the second one thanks again
loved
William Saint George
Wed, 2013-11-06 15:06
Hi loved
I liked this poem up until "A great manufacturer too".
I felt the factory man was a stronger, more powerful ending. God being removed from the lofty position religion has put him to that of a common factory worker is a really powerful image.
Nice poem though :D
No verse is free for the man who wants to do a good job. - TS Eliot
http://www.wsgeorge.com/
loved
Wed, 2013-11-06 16:15
Eyes behold
they scold
and
a poet is sold
amended
till god is powerful
loved