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Return to Me
Return to me the smiles
You took away
Return to me the tears
I shed anyway
And
Return to me if you must today,
The same way you did
When we made love last Saturday
Or return to my life
The same old way,
Else return all the love
Which I gave away
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Candlewitch
Mon, 2011-08-22 09:11
Dear Loved,
I very much enjoyed reading this sad yet hopeful piece. Very well written.
Or return to my life
The same old way,
Else return all the love
I gave away.
always, Cat
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And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
loved
Mon, 2011-08-22 09:43
Dear Cat
You add spice to my life,
and
I can only but thank you...
Please come by whenever
spare time, if any
is with you.
loved
scribbler
Mon, 2011-08-22 12:53
hi loved
Abit different style for you. I like this. You could try : When we made love last Saturday
and which I gave away and see if you like it............stan
loved
Mon, 2011-08-22 13:29
EXPERIENCE and Perception
Of seasoned players does count.
Stan,
Each poem of mine is
abs...
DIFFERENT
loved
loved
Mon, 2011-08-22 14:47
you undoubtedly are
my great unique poetic friend
who has a thought of her own
always...
keep it up
twill help
loved
loved
Mon, 2011-08-22 17:56
once again thanks
you encourage me also thanks tc
loved
weirdelf
Sun, 2011-08-28 00:40
Simple and effective.
A fine poem.
What is happening with you?
Your poetry is leaping and bounding into quality.
cheers,
Jess
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loved
Sun, 2011-08-28 10:06
ur
the sole source of my leaping,
sir thanks to u
i should have listened to u earlier.
loved